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Hi, I'm from Japan. I'm wondering if you could check my English presentation script.?

Hi, I'm from Japan. I'm wondering if you could check my English presentation script.?
Not just to check the grammar, also to correct the language of expression, make it feels like not so childish. And I think the word ''And'' is too many in my script. How do deal with it? Thanks very much
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"Things I like
Hello everyone, my name is XXX. Today I would like to talk about things I like and things I don't like.
First, This is guitar. I started to play guitar since the age of twelve. I usually play guitar in summer, because my imagination of guitar is funny, happy and roof. And that's how I think of summer. But piano is different. I usually play piano in winter. Because piano is easy to play more than guitar in winter. I also like composes, or makes up my own music, especially when there were some big days coming up. Last time, my friend said he wants to propose to his girlfriend, and then I wrote a song for him to write the lyric for himself. And he sings the song in front of his girlfriend at Syonan beach. And finally they get married at next month. Bye the way, this piano is kind of my dream, but it just a dream. Because it's really expensive. It takes about 20 million Yen.
I do like street lives. Sometimes I play street live too, but it just for fun, and for release my stresses. And I think 加藤ミリヤ, she is one of the most good singer in Japan. I like the way she singing. And this guy's name is Yamazato Ryota. I think he is one of the most funny comedian right now(presently? / at present?). And I like zombie movies.
And I also like to cook, especially cooking chinese food. This is one of my ''masterpiece'' in my friends birthday party. It's Sichuan dishes, and here is Guangdong dishes. It's also cooking by myself. And here is billiard, I do like this, you know, you can chatting while you are playing. And this is one of the most beautiful country side on the world. I love country side, I love calm places. That's one of the reason that I came to This University. I love here.

Things I dislike

I hate two of these. This guy's name is Matsuko Derakkusu. His body with what he says make me feel sick. Each time when I saw this guy on the TV, I just turn the TV off. And this creature also make me feel sick. I think they are genetically similar. "

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Hello everyone, my name is XXX. And today I would like to talk about all the things I like and all the things I don't like.

First off, This is a guitar. I started to play the guitar at the age of twelve. I usually just play the guitar in summer. When I see a guitar I see it as a happy, funny, instrument. But the piano is very different. I usually like playing the piano in winter. Because the piano is easier to play with more than guitar in winter. I also like composing and making my own music, especially when there are big events coming up, the last time, my friend said he wanted to propose to his girlfriend so I wrote a song for him. He was able to write the lyrics for himself and I came up with the tune. He sang the song in front of his girlfriend at Syonan beach. They got married next month. By, the way, this piano is kind of my dream, but it's just a dream. Because it's really expensive. It takes about 20 million Yen.
I do like the street live. Sometimes I act I've grown up in the streets too, it's only for fun, and to release my stress. I think 加藤ミリヤ, she is one of the best singer's in Japan. I like the way she sing's all her songs. This guy's name is Yamazato Ryota. I think he is one of the most funny comedian's out there right now I like zombie movies. I also like to cook, especially cooking chinese food. This is one of my ''masterpieces'' at my friends birthday party. It's a Sichuan dish, and here is a Guangdong dish. I also love cooking by myself. And here is billiard, I like this, you know why? You can chat while you are playing a game. And this is one of the most beautiful country side on the world. I love the country side, I love calm places. That's one of the reason that I came to This University. I love everything here.


Things I dislike

I hate this guy named Matsuko Derakkusu. Everything he says. He justs make me feel sick. Every time I see him on TV, I just turn it off. And this is an animal that also makes me feel sick. I think they are genetically similar.

(If you're reading this out loud INSERT A LAUGH)

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1 year ago

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Instead of "this is guitar," You could say "One thing I like is the guitar." "my imagination of guitar is funny, happy and roof" is grammatically incorrect, it would be "When I think about a guitar, I think about having fun, being happy, and a roof." also, "is easy to play more than guitar" should be "is easier to play than the guitar." "lyrics" instead of "lyric" "to compose" instead of "composes". "it is just a dream," not "it just a dream." "For release my stresses" should be "to relieve stress." "I love countryside" should be "I love the countryside." Also, instead of "And I think ______, she is one of the best..." you could use "I think______ is one of the...." And you don't need to say "at present" or "presently" if you say "right now." That's not all, but a bunch of it.

by Secret - 1 year ago