Question
Please proof read my cover letter?
I am very interested in the Event Coordinator position posted on Craigslist. Please accept this letter and enclosed resume as my application for the position. I believe my background and experience will help me be an asset to your company in a very short time. As you may observe in the attached resume, I have a proven ability to successfully manage multiple projects and task. My extrovert personality has been a plus to my five year event coordinating career. Being an experienced coordinator, I offer your organization knowledge and organizational sills. I’ve had the opportunity to serve a diverse group of clientele and view each clients event as a learning opportunity. In addition to my coordinator and consultative sales experience, I’m sure that you will find my technical skills a plus. I have working knowledge of Microsoft Office Suit and various other software programs. I want to express my genuine interest in furthering my coordinating career with your company. I am eager to interview for this position and confident I am a fit for your organization (according to the duties and responsibilities listed). I would love to share my bright smile, positive attitude, and energetic personality with your organization. I look forward to hearing from you in regard to this position. Thank you for your time and consideration
2 years ago - 3 answers
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-- each client's event (need the apostrophe) -- Microsoft Office Suite (not Suit) -- "coordinating career"? That sounds odd. Say "career as a coordinator"instead. Other than that, it sounds fine, if a bit wordy. Good luck!
by rtfm
2 years ago
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Spellings are very important, in this sentence skills is missing a k - I offer your organization knowledge and organizational sills - suite not suit other than those and the others that have been mentioned i will say that you have it all figured out.
by tmore1- 2 years ago
"As you may observe in the attached resume" - This sentence sounds awkward, change it. In paragraph2, "task" should be "tasks". " I offer your organization knowledge" - I can offer new knowledge and insight to your organization " I’m sure that you will find my technical skills a plus" - Don't use "plus", it sounds too casual. Something more along the lines of "to be beneficial" "Various other software programs" - Too vague, take that out and give specifics of all relevant programs. Obviously you need to address it to someone at the top and put your name at the bottom too. If they find out Yahoo Answers proofread your cover letter (all they have to do is type in one sentence and it will come up), I don't think they'll be impressed either.
by Yarcofin- 2 years ago